On Friday the 21st April we had to present and pitch our idea to Dom so Paul wrote up this initial script and treatment in order to portray what we wanted to do:
TREATMENT
Director: Ruby
Harman
Producer: Emma
Corbett
Programme: Drama Film ‘Journey’
This film
charts an ordinary day, in the life of an ordinary man, and the decision he
takes to escape his ordinary life forever.
Fed up
with the relentless monotony of his humdrum life, and the relentless nagging
from his humdrum wife, one man decides enough is enough and decides that the
time has come to make a change.
“Today is
the first day of the rest of his life.”
Duration: 1 X 5 minutes
Independent
production suitable for evening screening on BBC4, Channel 4 short films
strands, SKY Arts, competitions, festivals and webcast.
Format: Snappy, quick edits (Edgar
Wright style), dual cameras, shot on location. Extensive postproduction.
Audience: Teenagers and adults.
Aim : The aim of the film is to be
optimistic and show how a person can alter the course of their life and regain
the control of their own destiny that they once thought was lost to them.
Resumé: The film address social issues
of repression, and dissatisfaction and show how one man changes his life for
the better.
Suggested Elements: The
programme will use the depiction of early morning sunlight and the outside
world beyond the windows of the character’s home and office to depict the
entrapment that he feels. Use of
colour and lighting will highlight the drab interior confined world that he
spends the majority of his daily life in and the struggles and monotony that he
faces every day.
The end
scene will be ultra colourful to highlight his escape and his new journey in
life and his new adventure, free from his trappings.
The
carefully considered and manipulated use of sound editing will also build up
the struggle of his every day life and then a calming soundtrack over the
ending will emphasise the freedom he achieves.
Locations
Three locations:
- Norfolk
Park overlooking Sheffield city centre
- Kitchen of
working class home
- Office
interior
-
Characters
Three characters:
- man
- wife
- boss
Costumes
- Man:
shirt, tie, typical office attire
- Wife:
dowdy wife casual, beige / drab colours
- Boss:
smarter suit and tie
Props
- Kitchen:
cereal, milk bottle, bowl, spoon, clock
- Hall:
mirror, keys, bowl
- Office:
desktop / workstation items, files, pc, keyboard, phone, mug, pens, stapler,
paper, office clock
(END OF TREATMENT)
Script
Exterior: Norfolk Park. Early morning
Sunrise over city, city coming to life
Interior: Ordinary working class kitchen. Same early morning
Man sat at kitchen table.
Cereal bowl and milk bottle indicate breakfast.
Behind him noises build (kettle, toaster, radio). Incessant nagging of wife. Quick cuts from both sides behind his
head nagging him. He is being
nagged from all sides. Man looks
forward ignoring wife as best he can.
Close up of kitchen clock hitting 8am.
Man finishes cereal puts down spoon in bowl, stands up, leaves
table.
Cut to: (snappy
edits)
Int: Home
hallway
- Close up:
mirror reflection, man putting on tie
- CU:
putting shoes on
- CU: hand
picking up keys from bowl
- Wide:
house door shuts as he has left for work
Int: Office
corridor
Lift doors open, man piles out with numerous other people.
Int: Open
plan office
Man walks down middle of office towards his desk
Int: At desk
In set up reminiscent of being sat at kitchen table, man has
outside world view from window behind him. Inside all furniture is grey and artificial lighting harsh
and washed out. Desk top
paraphernalia indicates work station.
Around him noises begin to build (tapping typing on keyboards, printers,
phones ringing) arms of unidentified person dumps huge bundles of paperwork on
his desk with a thud. Phone rings,
sounds of disgruntled client on phone.
Behind him boss is ‘having a go’ at him in the same manner as nagging
wife in kitchen. Same cuts in edit
so that man gets verbal abuse from all sides. Man continues to look forward.
Close up of office clock hitting 5pm.
Man puts down last file on his mountain of paperwork, stands up,
leaves desk.
Int: Open
plan office
Man walks back down middle of office.
Int: Office
corridor
Man gets into lift, doors close.
Int: Home
hallway
(Snappy edits)
- Wide: Door
opens as he walks in
- Close up:
hand putting keys in bowl
- CU: taking
shoes off
Int: kitchen
Man sits down at same table that he got up from this morning.
Table set for evening meal: water jug and glasses, place mats,
cutlery.
As breakfast, noises build behind him (this time boiling pan,
microwave humming, washing machine whirring). Incessant nagging of wife. Quick cuts from both sides behind his head nagging him. He is being nagged from all sides. Same as breakfast.
Man looks forward ignoring wife.
Calmly gets up and leaves table.
Cut to: (snappy
edits)
Int: Home
hallway
- Close up:
mirror reflection, calmly, man takes off tie
- CU: putting
shoes on
- CU: hand
over keys in bowl
- CU: man
takes off wedding ring and puts it in bowl with the keys
- Wide:
house door shuts as he has left leaving keys and everything else behind him
Ext: House
Noises, and all other environmental sounds, fade as we follow
him walking away from house, onto pavement, and set off down road
Ext: Norfolk
Park (same location as beautiful sunrise)
Man walks away.
Camera stays at park gates as he walks off into distance up the park
tree lined avenue. Leaving the
city, and his old life, behind.
(END OF SYNOPSIS)
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