Second Draft

As Ed had created a first draft i copied this version and developed it further using Final Cut Pro. The main changes I made were in the sequence at the pub and the ending. During the pub scene I just rearranged the shots in order to make the sequence flow better and show that the character  has been drinking in the pub for a while. While uploading the footage there was a short sequence that didn't upload so I went in on Wednesday and uploaded this footage in order to be able to show the bags floating off together. This then gave us our Second Draft to show Dominic in out tutorial on Friday.

During our tutorial Dominic gave us good feed back about the narrative and that it was very effective. The only criticism is that the opening sequence leading up to the pub scene was slightly to long. He said about thinking about the shoots and whether they were actually important to the narrative rather then just a shot that looks nice. He mentioned about the pace of the piece and that we should try and create three different paces, one for the intro, one at the pub then a third pace towards the end. Also he mentioned about just making a few tweaks to the edit but other then that he liked it.